Hiya Great Rough cut - well done. I know you don't want to hear it but Andrew must sing the first line and look at the camera. It's a convention and you're getting marked on observing conventions. You can still keep the dramatic feel with "and you let her go". I'd also suggest slow motion in places, and the other aspect you need to look at is lighting in the dark parts near the end - (but before the lovely lantern sequence). Overall well done - I'm really pleased with this - but don't be complacent - it needs refining! mary
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ReplyDeleteGreat Rough cut - well done. I know you don't want to hear it but Andrew must sing the first line and look at the camera. It's a convention and you're getting marked on observing conventions. You can still keep the dramatic feel with "and you let her go". I'd also suggest slow motion in places, and the other aspect you need to look at is lighting in the dark parts near the end - (but before the lovely lantern sequence). Overall well done - I'm really pleased with this - but don't be complacent - it needs refining!
mary